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I feel my emotions die
As I watch the color of your eyes fade out
Just like the light in your heart-which was extinguished despite my attempts to keep it alive
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I purposely stopped breathing just to save more oxygen for the flame…
despite my pleas to stay here.. 
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:iconnightshade-keyblade:
nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A hero's nightmare, in more eloquent terms.
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yep... I suppose so. 
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:iconnightshade-keyblade:
nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
But people like you are a better alternative to a world so cold
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw.. :backhug: 
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I purposely stopped breathing just to save more oxygen for the flame…

What a line! Very re-mark-able. 
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:iconieatrosepetals:
ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for taking the time to read && comment! :heart: I'm glad you enjoyed~
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
very welcome, you are :)  
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
We can't always save the ones we love... :(
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:iconieatrosepetals:
ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I suppose not.. 
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Yeah... :(
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SpriteBlayde Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Tragic. :( But I love the impact this has on me, as a writer. Beautifully done, Cat. :heart:
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :heart: It was very interesting to write.. 
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SpriteBlayde Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome!
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014
How sad! It's a vivid reminder that one person can't save two people. But one person can just about destroy two people.
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh.. interesting take..
When I wrote this it was only about two people.. But I see how it can resemble three. 
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brokenisland Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014
Well, actually, I meant that one person in a pair can destroy the both of them. But I see that one person outside a pair can also cause destruction. All kinds of bad things are possible, I guess. I think I'll go lie under my bed for a while.
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah I see..
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AtrociousLamb Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Professional Artist
This is beautiful, and unfortunately so true at times.. I can't find proper wording for commentary, but I love the explicit impact it has. It's beautifully written:heart:
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much. :heart: 
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:iconatrociouslamb:
AtrociousLamb Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Professional Artist
Sorry, I'm lacking words at this time of day. It touched me though..
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:iconieatrosepetals:
ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
it's quite fine.
I'm glad it had some sort of impact. 
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:iconatrociouslamb:
AtrociousLamb Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Professional Artist
It serves as a reminder, for me at least... And it might be ..revelating to others.
:hug:
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle:
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Grangerbookworm Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
:huggle:
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug:
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:icongrangerbookworm:
Grangerbookworm Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Random side-note, I'm thefacelesswanderer that's following you :)
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ehh? O.O 
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:icongrangerbookworm:
Grangerbookworm Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Yup :) I made a new one~
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hurray for a new oneee!! 
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Grangerbookworm Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Yup :D I'm basically condensing my three old ones into one and not following 300 and some people
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ohh I see. 
Hopefully that goes better eh?xD
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